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The chart shows data about the type of books that people under 30 years old read

The chart shows data about the type of books that people under 30 years old read
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The bar graph gives information about the percentage of people who
under
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are under
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 30 years old
read
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who read
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 different
type
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types
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 of
books
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.
Overall
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, paper is the most popular kind of
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books
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book
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 for younger.
Accoding
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According
 to the chart, the proportion of teenagers reading print
books
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stand
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stands
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 around 85%, which
reachs
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reached
the
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its
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 peak.
Besides
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, from 72% to 73% is that of people who are both 18-24 and 25-29 like to read paper
books
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.
On the other hand
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, there
are
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is
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a
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the
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 same pattern between audiobook and e-book.
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While the
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 ratio of students who are 16-17 years old
hear
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who hear
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 stories from audio
account
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accounts
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 for about 15%
while
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 the figure
of
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for
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 them to watch on
the
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apply
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electronic devices is higher by around 5%.
Similarity
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, people who are 18-24 do not
spent
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spend
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 time
to read
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reading
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book
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books
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 too much, nearly 12% is the percentage of them view
book
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books
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 on the
internet
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Internet
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.
Howerver
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However
, the data of listening
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to audiobook
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audiobook
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audiobooks
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 is only around 11%, which is the lowest point.
Lastly
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,
aldults
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adults
 who are 18-24 and 25-29 using audio and e-book is approximately 12 percent.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Vocabulary: Replace the words books with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 3 times.
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