Many manufactured food and drink products contain high levels of sugar, which causes many health problems. Sugary products should be made more expensive to encourage people to consume less sugar. Do you agree or disagree?

In today's world, most consumables contain processed
sugar
and
as a result
consumption is the biggest reason for many health-related issues.
Therefore
some believe that sugary food and drinks should be priced high in order to control
sugar
consumption. Even,though I agree that
sugar
products
are unhealthy, I firmly disagree that emphasising only the
price
alone on processed
sugar
items does not help to mitigate people buying sweet
products
. In
this
essay, I will explain why other factors
also
should be considered in order to demotivate customers from buying
such
products
.
To begin
with, consuming processed
sugar
in high dosages can cause many individuals to gain long-term incurable diseases
such
as diabetes, cancer, insulin resistance, infertility, vision problems and many more. As an example, a study proved that many manufactured and imported
products
available in the Sri Lankan market contain high levels of
sugar
.
As a result
, recent research showed that
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Sri Lanka has the highest number of diabetes patients among the other South Asian countries.
On the other hand
, the product pricing should be fair for all the buyers irrespective of the customer spending power.
However
, the rich man will still end up buying
sugar
products
even though the
price
is high.
For example
, cornflakes are a popular breakfast option in many countries, but irrespective of the
price
still people end up having cornflakes as an easy option for morning meals. In my opinion, apart from the pricing factor, there can be another form of
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to discourage customers from buying high-
sugar
products
.
For instance
, educating the public on the adverse long-term effects of
sugar
through media would help consumers to reduce their
sugar
intake. In a nutshell, even though
price
control on
sugar
products
should not be the only factor to consider to demotivate the public from purchasing unhealthy
products
. In conclusion, in today's world, most individuals suffer from diabetes or obesity
due to
consuming high dosages of
sugar
which I
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I believe pricing does not affect consumers' purchasing choice of unhealthy foods.
Sugar
is the main ingredient for some foods and drinks but proper knowledge of the public can help people replace sweets will help to control
sugar
intake in an individual.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • health problems
  • manufactured food and drink products
  • sugary products
  • excessive sugar consumption
  • discourage
  • promote
  • healthier choices
  • reduce
  • increased taxes
  • fund
  • health education
  • prevention programs
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