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Children have more and more tests and exams to do at school,sometimes starting from the age of five or six,right up until the age of 18. What are the advantages and disadvantages of making children do exams?

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Nowadays,
children
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 are forced to do so many
exams
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 in the
school
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.Every so often,
children
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 take tests and
exams
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 from the time they enter grade until they graduate high
school
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.There are obviously some positive and negative appearing for
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 at
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young
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 age.
This
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 essay will examine the advantages and disadvantages of having kids take
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 at
school
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. There are
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 of pros sides to
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exams
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 and tests for pupils at
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.
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,
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 promote
compitation
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competition
 among
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, and
prepering
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preparing
youngsters
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 for the competitive world.
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 to say,when these
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 will become
adult
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 they have to prove themselves
education
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 and employment. In turn,it encourages students to work harder to improve their knowledge and skills.What is more ,
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exams
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 can motivate pupils to study and work hard to achieve good grades,leading to a better
understunding
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understanding
 of the subject.
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,schools are inclined to arrange
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 for
children
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. Like every coin has
another sides
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sending
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youngsters
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 to the exam hall has some drawbacks as well. Pupils start to give less importance
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sport
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 and other activities, which can have ill effects on the student's health.Another drawback is that
exams
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 can cause stress and anxiety.Evaluation of students with peers and parental pressure to make progress in each exam can
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 deteriorate
children
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's mental stability.
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, though
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 are an indispensable part of student life pressuring
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 at a very young age to attend
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 sometimes does not bring positive results always.
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