Some people think that it is better to educate boys and girls in separate schools. Others, however, believe that boys and girls benefit more from attending mixed schools. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion
Some people think that studying with mixed genders is more beneficial for
children
, while
others think that single gender
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single-gender
schools
are more effective than mixed schools
.
On the one hand, when boys and girls attend separate schools
, they will spend more time focusing on their studies
. This
is because there will not be any opposite gender to be attracted to and to get involved in any affairs. The schooling hours will be fully utilised to learn something rather than being diverted from studies
and spending time with the ones they might have affair
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affairs
with in
the Correct your spelling
within
school
. For example
, in Nepal, students from St. Mary’s Girls School
showed a better academic performance than the girls who completed their school
years from
a co-educational institution. Change preposition
at
However
, I believe that children
attending mixed school
will learn to be more social in the future.
On the other hand
, co-education is more beneficial for children
because they will learn some social skills during their school
years. This
is to say that children
of both genders will be allowed to have combined studies
and will learn how to deal politely with a person of the opposite sex, an important skill which is highly accepted by society. For example
, boys who finished their studies
at co-educational schools
showed more courtesy towards ladies by offering some help when required. For
this
reason, it is better for children
to attend mixed schools
as it helps them to learn essential social skills.
In conclusion, both of these mixed-gender schools
offer unique advantages and disadvantages. This
kind of school
can be a reason for getting involved in any affairs. However
, co-education is more educational for all students because they need more offline classes and they will learn social skills for it.Submitted by akzharkynzhamal on
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