The pie chart shows the amount of money that a children's charity located in the USA spent and received in one year.

The pie chart shows the amount of money that a children's charity 

located in the USA spent and received in one year.
The pie chart
illustrate
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illustrates
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income
and returns on US
donations
to children in one period.
Overall
, a quick look
show
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that revenues are slightly higher than expenditures, and food
donations
and program services dominate in every category. Based on the pie chart for revenue, the total
money
received by the charity is $53.5 million. The majority of
this
funding
are
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food
donations
,
are
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which are
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greater than any other source of
income
during
time
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the time
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period. The other results are
donations
to the community contributions, which
amount
to 10.4 % of the total, and program
income
, which amounts to more little over 2.2 % of the total
amount
.
In addition
, other sources of
income
give a small proportion of 0.4%.
Likewise
, investment
income
and government grants show a similar percentage of 0.2% in one year. Based on the data on the chart display,
total
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amount
income
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of income
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of
money
from expenditures
show
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shows
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a total
amount
of 53.2 million dollars, but
this
is slightly lower than
money
from revenue. In a year, program services represent value of
money
more than 90%,
while
contributions from fundraising, management and general activities are limited to the 1% to 3% range.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words income, donations, money, amount with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "show" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 5 times.
Vocabulary: The word "slightly" was used 2 times.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • donations
  • grants
  • fundraising events
  • expenditure
  • administration costs
  • program expenses
  • direct benefits
  • indirect benefits
  • underprivileged children
  • education
  • healthcare
  • shelter
  • nourishment
  • medical treatments
  • basic needs
  • financial sustainability
  • transparency
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