Today, many people do not know their neighbours in large cities . What problems does this cause ? What can be done about this ?
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reason
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on
phone
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phones
reason
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of people
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to
neighbors
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neighbours
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are
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neighbours
reason
for this
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or Fix the agreement mistake
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hang
out with friends , especially meeting their Wrong verb form
hanging
neighbors
. Besides
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that people
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that
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or
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of
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life
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were dedicated
on
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to
think
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could
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by 3.6
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the
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apply
nowadays
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people
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meeting
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people
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neighbours
relationship
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relationships
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