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Today, many people do not know their neighbours in large cities . What problems does this cause ? What can be done about this ?

#people #neighbours #cities
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Nowadays, the majority of
people
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 do not recognize that they do not know their
neighbors
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face
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. The main
reason
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cause
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this
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 phenomenon is
people
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 spend their
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for
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on
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 their
phone
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 to create more virtual friends . The second main
reason
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 is the fast pace of life in
urban
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 area make
they
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them
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 dedicate their ages
for
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to
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 work .
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this ungainly situations
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this ungainly situation
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 be solved by the awareness
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people
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of people
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 in the way that how they react and
responsibilities
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their responsibilities
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with
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to
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 their
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neighbors
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 politely and show
their
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they're
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 what
is
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are
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 the good points when they have
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neighbors
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 The key
reason
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 for
this
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 phenomenon is the
time
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 that
people
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 spend on their
phone
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phones
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 increasing every year
that
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they just use their
time
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 for surfing the Internet ,
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and satisfied
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satisfied
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satisfying
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 their requirements , not for
exercises
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exercise
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 or
hang
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hanging
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 out with friends , especially meeting their
neighbors
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 .
Besides
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 that , Apple shows the percentage of the
time
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 that
people
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 spend their
time
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 on Apple 's products is double
than
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the
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that
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last
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 year Another key
reason
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which is
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that
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cause
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causes
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 emotional rift is the objective
reason
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 which
existed
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exists
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 in everyone is the fast pace
or
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of
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 human
life’s
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life
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. They
dedicated
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were dedicated
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on
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to
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 their career and just
think
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thought
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 that money
can
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 solve everything and their house was just a place that they
use
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used
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 for resting not for connecting
between
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apply
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people
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 . Generally ,
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scientists
displays
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 a table
data
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of data
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 about the speed of our footsteps
speed
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these days. It
increase
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increases
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3.6
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by 3.6
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% per year and fifty times the walks in recent centuries.
With
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the
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modern society
nowadays
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,
people
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 always choose which things
is
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are
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 good for them , so why we don't indicate the benefits when they have
neighbors
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.
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 It can help them in many circumstances
such
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 as when it happens
some
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an
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 incident , they can help you or save your
life’s
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life
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. Creating some
meeting
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meetings
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,
it
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apply
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can make you feel
cozy
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. Taking everything into account ,
people
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have
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spending
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 their
time
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 with their
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neighbors
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neighbours
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is
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better than alone.
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Consequently
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 they do not have to spend
their
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apply
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time
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 too much on their job. spend little with the
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neighbors
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neighbours
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 to create more
relationship
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relationships
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.
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