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The graph below shows electricity production (in terawatt hours) in France between 1980 and 2012

The graph below shows electricity production (in terawatt hours) in France between 1980 and 2012
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This
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 graph depicts 4 resources of energy production in France over 30
years
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,
while
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 hydroelectric, renewables, and thermal experienced a negligible change, the most dramatic increase was seen in nuclear. Standing at 50
terawatt
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hours
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, electricity produced by nuclear power was 50 times higher than renewable sources, the lowest.
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 number rocketed and hit the highest point at 451
terawatt
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hours
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 in 2005, it decreased slightly to 440
terawatt
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hours
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at the end
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 of the observed period.
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, before renewables sources witnessed a moderate growth of 25
terawatt
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hours
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 in 2010,
this
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 figure remained unchanged over 15
years
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On the other hand
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, the number of electricity produced by thermal, which stood at 125
terawatt
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 horse, was the highest resource in 1980 declined by 75 units over 5
years
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then
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 remained unchanged from 1985 to 2010, at 50
terawatt
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 after fluctuating around 75
terawatt
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 over 25
years
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, hydroelectric remained stable at 50
terawatt
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hours
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 for the rest of the observed period

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Vocabulary: Replace the words years, terawatt, hours with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "remained" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "stand" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "unchanged" was used 2 times.
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