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The charts below show the results of a survey of adult education. The first chart shows the reasons why adults decide to study. The pie chart shows how people think the costs of adult education should be shared. Write a report for a university lecturer, describing the information shown below. » You should write at least 150 words.

The charts below show the results of a survey of adult education. The first chart shows the reasons why adults decide to study. The pie chart shows how people think the costs of adult education should be shared. Write a report for a university lecturer, describing the information shown below. » You should write at least 150 words.
#show #results #survey #adult #education #first #adults #study #people #costs #report #university #lecturer #information
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The graph below gives information
the
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on the
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 outcome of the survey. The first graph compares the total percentages that
decide
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decided
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 to
study
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 divided
seven
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into seven
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 categories. The pie chart illustrates how people believe the costs of
adults
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adult
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 education have to
shared
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be shared
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.
Overall
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, the graph indicates that there were
grater
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greater
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 percentages of people who
interested
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were interested
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 in
subject
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the subject
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 and
to gain
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gaining
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 qualifications
higher
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apply
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.
Furthermore
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, the most popular reason to
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be interest
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interest
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interested
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 in
subject
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the subject
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. For those students who profess that
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study
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studying
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 would help them in getting a promotion and that it is an interesting activity, an equal result is gathered (20%). A meagre number of students, 12% and 9%, feel that
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study
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studying
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 would assist them
to get
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in getting
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 a new job. From the second pie chart ,
it is clear that
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 the individual should be the highest cost bearer for his own
study
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 (40%).
Next,
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comes the employer at 35% and after that the taxpayer with the least burden (25%) of the cost.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words study with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "graph" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentages" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • percentage distribution
  • stakeholders
  • pursue further education
  • financial contribution
  • survey results
  • policy implications
  • correlation
  • adult education
  • distribution of costs
  • significant differences
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