the table below shows the changes in some household types in canada from 1984 to 2020

the table below shows the changes in some household types in canada from 1984 to 2020
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This
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table illustrates the different family compositions or individuals who
live
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in a house in Canada from 1984 until 2020 in percentages.
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, in 1984, one-family households with dependent
children
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covered the highest
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compared to “Lone
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parents
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” who had the lowest
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. From 1984 until 2020, there was an increase in family structure where people were living alone whilst there was a decrease in one-family households. In 1984, Lone parent was in only 4% with the lowest
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group,
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, surprisingly increased to 12% in 2020.
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, the category of individuals who were living alone increased from 6% in 1984 to 12% in 2020.
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, the
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of parents with dependent
children
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decreased dramatically from 1984 to 2020, 52% and 36% respectively.
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, the households of the family with non-dependent
children
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from 1984 and 2020, had a slight fluctuation over the years. Couples with no
children
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increased steadily during the given period.
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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Vocabulary: Replace the words children, percentage with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "percentages" was used 5 times.
Vocabulary: The word "decrease" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 4 times.
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