The map below is of the town of Garlsdon. A new supermarket (S) is planned for the town. The map shows two possible sites for the supermarket.

The map below is of the town of Garlsdon. A new supermarket (S) is planned for the town. The map shows two possible sites for the supermarket.
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The map outlines two possible locations
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a brand-new modern market in the city of Garlsdon.
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, the planned sites are marked with S1 and S2, where S1 is located
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the northwest of the countryside,
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the second option is in the town centre. As the first alternative, the new supermarket will be located
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the northwest of the town. Precisely, it is planned to be
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the middle of the railway and the main road 12 km to Hindon with 10.000 inhabitants. The location of S1 is on the northwest of the industrial area.
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, the second choice of the market's location is in the city's centre with zero traffic. It is forecasted to be built on the south side of the railway.
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, the main roads to Bransfon and Cransdon are the nearest ways from the S2 forecasted position. After crossing the industrial area, the road to Bransdon which has 15.000 population is on the southwest of the planned site. Meanwhile, Cransdon with almost twice the number of Bransdon citizens can be reached by accessing the main road on the southeast of S2.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Accessibility
  • Congestion
  • Economic benefits
  • Environmental impact
  • Foot traffic
  • Green space
  • Job creation
  • Local property values
  • Parking availability
  • Pollution
  • Proximity
  • Public transportation
  • Sustainability
  • Traffic patterns
  • Residential areas
  • Shopping convenience
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