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You are not happy with the course you are doing at college and would like to change to a different course. Write a letter to the Head of Department to change your course. In your letter, explain: - what course you are doing now - why you are not satisfied with that course - what course you would like to change to

#course #college #change #head #department
Dear Sir or Madam, I am writing to lodge a formal complaint about one of the courses I am attending
this
 term. At the beginning of the semester, I opted for the famous modern history
course
 conducted by Mr. John Anderson. I heard a lot about
this
course
 when I was finishing school, and his lectures were one of the main reasons why I selected our university.
Initially
, there were not any problems, but when three weeks passed, I started noticing that approximately 70 per cent of the information
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 the
course
 was severely outdated. I have spent almost twenty hours on fact-checking over the
last
 two weeks, and I am ready to provide you with some conclusions
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 my research if you need it. I heard that Dr. Wang returned from China
last
 week, and I would like to ask you to replace my history
course
 with Chinese philosophy one.
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I started writing my bachelor's qualification paper
last
 month, and it is dedicated to the early ages of the Ming dynasty reign. I look forward to hearing from you. Yours faithfully, Jack Shepard
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task response
Ensure to clearly express the reasons for dissatisfaction with the current course and provide a persuasive argument for the change.
coherence and cohesion
The greeting and closing are appropriate but ensure consistency in the formality of language throughout the letter.
lexical resource
A wide range of vocabulary is used appropriately, but pay attention to using more precise and academic-specific language to enhance the lexical resource.
grammatical range
Grammar and sentence structure are generally accurate; however, review punctuation usage and consider varying sentence structures for better grammatical range.

Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Linking words are very important in your essay.

To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

Linking word examples:

  • firstly
  • secondly
  • thirdly
  • in additional
  • moreover
  • also
  • for example
  • for instance
  • therefore
  • however
  • although
  • even though
  • despite

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