The graph below shows the average monthly change in the prices of three metals during 2014.

The graph below shows the average monthly change in the prices of three metals during 2014.
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The graph illustrates how the price of three metals
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changed from January to December
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2014. In these 12
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, the charge of the nickel had seen obvious changes. There was a plunge in the percentage
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of price compared with the previous month, from 6% in January to 1% in March, before remaining constant until April.
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figure declined to –3% in June, from which time onwards,
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percentage showed a slight growth to –1% in July and kept plateau until October. During the
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three
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, the percent
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was recorded
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increase to 1% in December.
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, the
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of costs compared with the previous month in the copper and zinc witnessed marginal changes. The
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between January and December showed a fluctuation between 3% and –1% in the percentage of zinc.
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, a fluctuation could be seen in the figure for copper around 1%.
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, among these 12
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, the price of nickel showed a significant
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, and the cost of copper and zinc was basically stable.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words months, change with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "compared" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "showed" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "changed" was used 7 times.
Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 3 times.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • average monthly change
  • prices of metals
  • trend
  • spike
  • fluctuation
  • increase
  • decrease
  • sharp rise
  • sharp fall
  • stability
  • volatility
  • data points
  • comparison
  • contrast
  • external factors
  • influences
  • market dynamics
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