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The chart below shows the amount spent on six consumer goods in four European countries. Write a report for a university lecturer describing the information shown below. (Numbers mean “thousand”)

The chart below shows the amount spent on six consumer goods in four European countries. Write a report for a university lecturer describing the information shown below. (Numbers mean “thousand”)
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The given data illustrates the expenses of six client products in Britain, France, Italy and Germany. The initial impression from the chart is the sales rate of all goods is the highest in Britain,
whereas
 the indicated in
chart
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 products’
buy-and -selling
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 level in Germany is much lower and the other significant pattern
that
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population
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 of given four European countries spends much more money on photographic film than on personal stereos,
although
Germans
 buy toys and CDs even less. The French and the Italians spend slightly over 150 000 on toys
,
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when
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 the
Germans
 spend around 145 000 which is the same amount they spend on CDs,
however
, the
Germans
 spend just over 145 000 on personal stereos like
as
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people in France. The biggest amount of expenses can be indicated in Britain on photographic film, where British people spend
on
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the
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it
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nearly 170 thousand,
while
Germans
 buy the same
good
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goods
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fewer
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less and spend around 150 thousand.
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