Some people think that one of the best ways to solve environmental problems is to increase the cost of fuel. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

In the contemporary era, every country is facing issues in order to safeguard
environment
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the environment
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from harmful
emission
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emissions
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of gases
therefore
efforts are being made to spike in
cost
of
fuel
. I believe that only
hike
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a hike
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in
fuel
is not
realistic
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a realistic
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approach. Some people will continue to use these petroleum products even if
cost
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the cost
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will be increased for these services in
near
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the near
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future. I completely disagree with
this
statement.
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essay will discuss the idea and will justify my opinion. On
one
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hand, environmental issues are
major
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a major
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concern for everyone as
huge
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a huge
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increase
in population and meeting their requirements are
biggest
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the biggest
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concern
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concerns
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for most
of
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the
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apply
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countries. For
meeting
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the daily needs of individuals, there are
provision
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provisions
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of
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for
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increase
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an increase
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in
usage
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the usage
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of transportation which is
further
adding harmful pollution and detrimental effects to every living being.
For example
,
article
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an article
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published in
Times
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the Times
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of India
,
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indicated that
cost
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the cost
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of petroleum products
is
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has
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already increased when
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to a decade ago,
still
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but still
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there are spike in
number
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a number
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of vehicles on
road
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the road
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and increasing day by day.
This
is proven that even if authorities
will
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increase
cost
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the cost
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of
fuel
but
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apply
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no impact is observed on
usage
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the usage
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of transportation. On
other
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the other
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hand, there is a need
of
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alternative
source
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sources
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of
energy
along with
spike
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a spike
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in
cost
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the cost
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of
fuel
services. Relevant authorities and
energy
conservationist
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conservationists
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should focus on other
sources
of
energy
.
For instance
,
Ministry
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the Ministry
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of Biodiversity should focus on other renewable
sources
of
energy
like fossil
fuel
, methane gas so on.
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small efforts will be able to save our planet from harmful pollution and efforts are being made to find other
sources
of
energy
.
To conclude
, by
increase
in
cost
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the cost
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of petroleum
product
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products
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alone will not
able
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be able
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to solve environmental problems,
therefore
there is
requirement
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a requirement
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of
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for
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conservative
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a conservative
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approach by both authorities and our
scientist
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scientists
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so that we will not face detrimental issues by depleting our
energy
sources
for our upcoming generation.
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Task Achievement
Consider providing a clearer introduction that directly addresses the prompt by stating your position clearly, whether you agree or disagree with the increase in the cost of fuel as a solution to environmental problems. The conclusion should also directly restate your position and summarize the main points of your argument.
Coherence and Cohesion
Work on the logical flow and clarity of your ideas. Use clear topic sentences at the beginning of each paragraph and ensure that each paragraph has one main idea that is further developed and supported with specific examples or explanations.
Lexical Resource
Expand your vocabulary by using a wider range of synonyms and less common words to articulate your ideas more precisely. Avoid repetition of the same words or phrases and try to demonstrate a flexible use of language.
Grammatical Range
Improve your grammatical range by using a variety of complex sentence structures and ensuring subject-verb agreement. Pay attention to the correct use of articles, prepositions, and conjunctions to enhance the accuracy of your writing.

You are not ready for IELTS Speaking, if you

  • Can’t speak smoothly without pauses.
  • Use simple words and lack vocabulary.
  • Feel nervous and anxious when speaking.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • consumption
  • emissions
  • alternative energy
  • conservation
  • mitigate
  • renewable energy technologies
  • affordability
  • collective action
  • innovation in energy efficiency
  • global cooperation
  • environmental measures
  • pollution
  • economic disparity
  • revenue
  • sustainable development
  • environmental sustainability
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