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the plans below show the layout of a university's sports centre now, and how it will look after redevelopment. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

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The maps show the proposed changes to a university
sports
 facility. The recommended changes are intended to improve the facility's services and users'
overall
 experience. The plan is for enlarging the
sports
 complex's two sides and adding a number of fresh amenities, including a leisure pool, a café, a
sports
 shop, and dance studios. The present outdoor court on the west side will be replaced with a leisure pool that will be easily connected to a cutting-edge changing area on the southwest corner. The neighbouring reception, changing area, and seating layout will be expanded
while
 the centre 25-meter pool will stay unaltered.
Additionally
, a
sports
 store will be built close to the new changing area. The east side of the facility will
also
 undergo significant changes, with the elimination of the outdoor courts to make space for the new amenities. A second changing room, connected to a brand-new café, will be established on the south-east corner.
Additionally
, two dance studios will be constructed close to the
sports
 hall, one of them next to the freshly renovated gym.
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task response
Ensure that the essay fully addresses all aspects of the task and provides a clear summary of the information provided in the maps.
coherence cohesion
Maintain a clear and logical structure throughout the essay, ensuring that ideas are connected and developed coherently.
lexical resource
Expand the range of vocabulary used to describe the changes and improvements in the sports facility, incorporating more specific and varied lexical choices.
grammatical range
Diversify sentence structures and grammatical forms to demonstrate a wide range of control in expressing ideas and information.

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