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People learn in different ways. Some people learn by doing; some people learn by reading; others learn by listening to lectures or watching demonstrations. Which of these methods of learning is best for you? Use specific examples to support your choice.

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The way of learning is different for some
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people
, we currently have several forms of learning. We have
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,
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,
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 media,
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 they help us,
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 can
also
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This
 essay will demonstrate different points of view and my opinion about learning forms around the world. First of all, I think that learning is a basic need of humans. We have learned to read, speak,
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 when are children. In my
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 each
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type
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 of learning, there are
people
 who learn visually, with images,
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and painting
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,
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and people
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that
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 learn
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by listening
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music
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and viedos
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videos
, and
this
 is discovered over
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life. In 1992,
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researcher
 Neil Flamming defined the 4 learning styles based on abilities, visual, auditory, read/write,
kinesthetic
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.
Therefore
 it is apparent that learning is a basic need of humans.
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,
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 we have other ways of learning,
for
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example,
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 there are
computer
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computers
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, social media, internet. We can
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access
 information anywhere and anytime, and
this
 can help us. The
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technology
also
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a
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 important impact on our quality of learning is used profitably.
For
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 a recent study conducted by the Journal Veja concluded that the relationship
of
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 teacher and student has improved with
coming
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the coming
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 new
tecnologies
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technologies
,
this
 occurs because students have a good
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 with
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computers
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,
social
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and social
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 media. In conclusion,
although
 there are clear benefits of ensuring good learning
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 several forms, it is important to highlight that learning depends on us. We only learn if we have determination. In the future,
people
 should consider several
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methods
 of
the
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apply
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learning.
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Provide specific examples to support your points.
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lexical resource
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
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