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Some people say we do not need printed newspapers anymore. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion

#people #newspapers
It is commonly argued that physical
newspapers
 are no longer essential. I completely agree with
this
 notion
due to
 the greater updatability of online
newspapers
 and how more natural resources can be saved. The first justification for my agreement is that online
newspapers
 would be superior to conventional ones in terms of faster updates. More specifically, they can provide
up-to-the-minute
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 information about events that are happening domestically and globally, enabling Internet users to obtain current
news
 in a matter of minutes.
For example
, when the Russo-Ukrainian War broke out, the information about its occurrence and consequences was updated instantly and continuously on different media platforms
such
 as TV and the Internet.
On the contrary
, newspaper readers have to wait for at least several days to acquire the
news
 about it
due to
 the long process of editing and publishing. Another reason why I am of the opinion that traditional
newspapers
 could be superseded by Internet-based
news
 is that more natural resources can be saved.
While
 the production of physical
newspapers
 requires a large amount of paper,
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and the distribution of
newspapers
 by truck, the proliferation of online
news
 would prevent a substantial number of trees
being
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 felled and reduce emissions of pollutants into the air. As environmentally friendly lifestyles are being favoured by more people in contemporary society,
paperbased
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newspapers
 are more likely to become obsolete. In conclusion, I strongly maintain that paper-based articles are falling into disuse and are not required because
news
 in other media is a more beneficial source of information owing to their ability to be updated quickly and save natural materials. It is advisable that the government take action to enhance cybersecurity to ensure the veracity of
news
 on the Internet
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