In some countries, owning a home rather than renting one is very important for people. Why might this be the case? Do you think this is a positive or negative situation?
Selecting a place and location to live is a big decision for many
people
. In different part
of the world, Fix the agreement mistake
parts
human
value Fix the agreement mistake
humans
for
their own accommodation and Change preposition
apply
huge
part of them prefer that, they Add an article
a huge
should
have their own Verb problem
apply
house
rather than renting one. Because,
they sense which could save Remove the comma
apply
money
in interval long term. From my perspective, house
ownership is a natural human desire.
To begin
with, every person in whole
life needs stability and Correct pronoun usage
their whole
live
in peace. against all Fix the infinitive
to live
expectation
that Fix the agreement mistake
expectations
own
Wrong verb form
owning
residence
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a residence
house
can make, many people
have desire
to have at least one of Correct article usage
a desire
it
replace renting. Correct pronoun usage
them
For instance
, getting loans from Add an article
the bank
bank
for Fix the agreement mistake
banks
their
personal housing is a prevalent method Correct pronoun usage
apply
in
all over the world. Change preposition
apply
In addition
, citizen rights such
as:
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apply
opportunity
to renovate frequently, destroy and Add an article
the opportunity
an opportunity
building
new Wrong verb form
build
flat
and Fix the agreement mistake
flats
living
peacefully without the intervention of others, are small benefits of Wrong verb form
live
house
ownership. Admittedly, in several country
, it is really hard to own a Change to a plural noun
countries
house
for majority
of the population and you Add an article
the majority
are ending
up paying heavy rent. Wrong verb form
end
Consequently
, citizen
must pay a huge part of their incomes to the landlords every month.
Fix the agreement mistake
citizens
Nonetheless
, others think that buying a luxury home is wasting
of Wrong verb form
a waste
money
. They believe that it is wrong to have a lot of capital to own a house
; because,
they can make income generation and make profit from that. Not only is it wrong to buy a Remove the comma
apply
house
for people
who do not have enough income or wealth, but also
, they could start a business with it and after that, can buy their own land from their profit. From then
on, they would not probably squander money
on useless things. For instance
, when people
have intention
to buy Change the article
the intention
home
, their shopping or eating Add an article
a home
the home
habit
will be changed to allocate Fix the agreement mistake
habits
money
for buying a house
.
To sum up
, renting a property means that the tenant is at the mercy of the landlords and it cannot save money
in long
Correct article usage
the long
terms
. Fix the agreement mistake
term
Hence
, owning a house
provide
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provides
sense
of stability and security throughout life.Add an article
a sense
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