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In some countries, owning a home rather than renting one is very important for people. Why might this be the case? Do you think this is a positive or negative situation?

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Selecting a place and location to live is a big decision for many
people
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. In different
part
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 of the world,
human
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humans
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 value
for
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their own accommodation and
huge
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a huge
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 part of them prefer that, they
should
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have their own
house
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 rather than renting one. Because
,
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 they sense which could save
money
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 in interval long term. From my perspective,
house
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 ownership is a natural human desire.
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 with, every person in
whole
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their whole
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 life needs stability and
live
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 in peace. against all
expectation
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expectations
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 that
own
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owning
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residence
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a residence
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house
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 can make, many
people
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 have
desire
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a desire
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 to have at least one of
it
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them
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 replace renting.
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, getting loans from
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the bank
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bank
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banks
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 for
their
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personal housing is a prevalent method
in
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all over the world.
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, citizen rights
such
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 as
:
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opportunity
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the opportunity
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 to renovate frequently, destroy and
building
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build
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 new
flat
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flats
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 and
living
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live
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 peacefully without the intervention of others, are small benefits of
house
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 ownership. Admittedly, in several
country
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, it is really hard to own a
house
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majority
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the majority
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 of the population and you
are ending
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 up paying heavy rent.
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,
citizen
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citizens
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 must pay a huge part of their incomes to the landlords every month.
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, others think that buying a luxury home is
wasting
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 of
money
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. They believe that it is wrong to have a lot of capital to own a
house
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; because
,
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 they can make income generation and make profit from that. Not only is it wrong to buy a
house
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 for
people
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 who do not have enough income or wealth, but
also
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, they could start a business with it and after that, can buy their own land from their profit. From
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 on, they would not probably squander
money
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 on useless things.
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, when
people
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 have
intention
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the intention
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 to buy
home
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a home
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, their shopping or eating
habit
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habits
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 will be changed to allocate
money
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 for buying a
house
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.
To sum up
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, renting a property means that the tenant is at the mercy of the landlords and it cannot save
money
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 in
long
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the long
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terms
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term
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.
Hence
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, owning a
house
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provide
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provides
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sense
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a sense
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 of stability and security throughout life.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • ownership
  • renting
  • importance
  • sense of security
  • stability
  • financial investment
  • asset
  • customize
  • decorate
  • belonging
  • community
  • potential
  • future generations
  • long-term
  • cost advantage
  • control
  • living space
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