It is important for people to take risks, both in their professional lives and their personal lives. Do you think the advantage of taking risks outweigh the disadvantages?

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Nowadays it is a common phenomenon that
peoples
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are taking
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in
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personal
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as well as
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professional
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presume that the benefit of
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precautionary action would surpass its drawback to a major extent. My position is elaborated
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. Examining the brighter side, the foremost one is that without taking
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nobody might be able to succeed in their daily
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, if anybody wants to keep himself
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comfort
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zone, he will not find the right path in his
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, Alan Mask -CEO of the space company Space X- is now one of the best businessmen in the world now because of his
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risk taking
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capability. On the other side, if you see Bill
gates
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, one of the
billionier
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billionaire
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human
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in
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earth
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out
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his university but after his dedication he became the richest person in the world.
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, There are some darker sides
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taking risks in
life
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. if a surgeon
have
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taken
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risk
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without proper preparation during
operation
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the operation
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he may easily
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a mistake.
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,
patients
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life
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fall
in
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a risky situation.
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, If anybody quit his job before
get
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a good job
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it will be difficult for him to run the next
upcoming
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bad situation. Having discussed the
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arguments
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counterargumets
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counterarguments
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i
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would like to infer that without taking
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risk
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nobody can succeed in his
life
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