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It is important for people to take risks, both in their professional lives and their personal lives. Do you think the advantage of taking risks outweigh the disadvantages?

#people #risks #lives #advantage
Nowadays it is a common phenomenon that
peoples
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people
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 are taking
risk
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risks
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 in
there
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their
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 personal
life
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lives
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as well as
 professional
life
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lives
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.
i
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 presume that the benefit of
this
 precautionary action would surpass its drawback to a major extent. My position is elaborated
further
 with reasons and relevant
eamples
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examples
. Examining the brighter side, the foremost one is that without taking
risk
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risks
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 nobody might be able to succeed in their daily
life
.
Additionally
, if anybody wants to keep himself
into
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in
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comfort
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his comfort
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 zone, he will not find the right path in his
life
.
For instance
, Alan Mask -CEO of the space company Space X- is now one of the best businessmen in the world now because of his
risk taking
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risk-taking
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 capability. On the other side, if you see Bill
gates
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, one of the
billionier
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billionaire
billionaires
human
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humans
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in
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on
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 earth
drops
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 out
from
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 his university but after his dedication he became the richest person in the world.
On the contrary
, There are some darker sides
of
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to
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 taking risks in
life
. if a surgeon
have
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has
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 taken
risk
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a risk
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 without proper preparation during
operation
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the operation
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 he may easily
made
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make
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 a mistake.
Consequently
,
patients
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patients'
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life
 fall
in
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into
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 a risky situation.
Moreover
, If anybody quit his job before
get
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 a good job
then
 it will be difficult for him to run the next
upcoming
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apply
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bad situation. Having discussed the
argemnts
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arguments
 and
counterargumets
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counterarguments
counterargument
.
i
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I
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 would like to infer that without taking
risk
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risks
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nobody can succeed in his
life
.
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