The chart below shows the changes in three different areas of crime in MAnchester city center from 2003-2012.

The chart below shows the changes in three different areas of crime in MAnchester city center from 2003-2012.
This
chart illustrates the frequency of
crime
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criminal
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act
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acts
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in Manchester. It is divided into 3
type
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types
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of crimes, that are burglary, car theft, and robbery from 2003 to 2012.
Overall
, burglary took the highest record with 3750 records in 2004. From the chart, it shows that the
number
of robbery are the lowest
number
compared
the
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2 others. The growth was quite constant. The highest
number
was
happened
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in 2005 with 900 reports,
while
the lowest
number
was
happened
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in 2008 with 500 reports.
Next,
the burglary graph is
fluctiative
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fluctuating
. After
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reaching
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reached
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the
higest
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highest
number
in 2004,
then
it sharply decreased till 2008 reached the lowest value which is 1000 numbers. After that, it went with constant
progres
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progress
till 2012.
Last
,
the
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car theft which shows slowly decreased
by
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from
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2003 to 2006, and
the
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quite
sharp
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sharply
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increased
by
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from
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2006 to 2012. In the
last
year, it took the first place of the highest
number
with 2700 numbers
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