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the table below gives information on consumer spending on different items in five different countires in 2002.

the table below gives information on consumer spending on different items in five different countires in 2002.
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The given table depicts the
ratio
 of national
consumers
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consumer
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expanses
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expenses
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 on seven different items
of
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from
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 five different countries in 2002.
Overall
, Turkey's people dominated the amount of spending on food/drinks/tobacco and
leisure
/
education
while
 the highest spent on clothing/footwear was occupied by Italy's citizens.
In contrast
, Spain
took
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spent
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 the lowest spent on
Leisure
education
.
Initially
, Turkey
has
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had
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 the highest amount
on
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of
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 consumer spending towards food/drinks/tobacco compared to consumers in Ireland at 32.14% and 28.91%, respectively.
Eventually
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 Italy’s people took the third highest spent on it, they were witnessed as the top
ratio
 of clothing/footwear
buyer
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buyers
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, followed by Turkish.
Furthermore
, Sweden
as
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has
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 the least
ratio
 of food/drinks/tobacco expended at 15.775.
On the other hand
, Italian and Sweden had
the
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a
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 similar
ratio
 of
leisure
/
education
citizen
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citizens
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 spent with the former at 3.20 % and the latter at 3.22%.
However
, The lowest percentage of consumers spending on
leisure
/
education
 was taken by Spain’s people at 1.98%
in
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while
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which
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Turkey has slightly over twice higher
ratio
 of clients at 4.35%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words ratio, leisure, education with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "ratio" was used 5 times.
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