the table below gives information on consumer spending on different items in five different countires in 2002.

the table below gives information on consumer spending on different items in five different countires in 2002.
The table shows the percentage of
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expenses
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three different categories in five states in the year 2002. In general, most of the spending incurred was in primary needs,
while
the least was in leisure or education purposes. To commence with, all countries saw the largest expenditure on diet, beverage, or tobacco, where Turkey used by far the most expenditure at 32.14%, followed by Ireland at 28.91%,
while
Spain
, Italy, and Sweden were below 20%.
On the contrary
, clothing or footwear spending in Italy was at 9.00%, making it higher than other states. Meanwhile, Ireland,
Spain
, and Turkey shared the same percentage at approximately 6%, and Sweden was only 5.40%.
On the other hand
, entertainment or education showed the lowest percentage of expenditure compared to
other
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two categories used by
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nations. Turkey had the largest expense at 4.35%,
while
Sweden and Italy were 3.22 and 3.20, respectively.
Furthermore
, Ireland was only at 2.21% and
Spain
was at 1,98%, which meant that
Spain
spent the least
at
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this
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items.
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