The diagram illustrates how bees produce honey

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the diagram

give

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us information about producing

honey

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bees

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overall

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,it can be seen that there are 7 stages in order to get

honey

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from

bees

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. first of all .

bees

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create

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creat

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hive

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that they live in

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then

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,they leave the

hive

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in order to search for flowers when they find

out

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flowers , they collect nectar ,

after

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this

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stage

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they go back to the

hive

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fourth stage

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started in the 4 stage

bees

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put nectars

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the cells , ,after having completed

this

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process ,all cells are full of nectars

moreover

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bees

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speared air

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their wings . before we get the

honey

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, water in the

hive

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change

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to gas by water evaporation .

finally

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honey

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is ready to sell and eat .

dler_shakarFri Nov 10 2023

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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.

Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.

Basic structure: Change the second paragraph.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words honey, bees, hive with synonyms.

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Vocabulary: Only 5 basic words for charts were used.

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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.

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6
Linking words
meeting the goal of 7 or more
3
Word repetition
meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
10
Grammar mistakes
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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 8.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Introduction & conclusion present

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 6.0

Complete response

Suitable writing tone

Appropriate word count

3 paragraphs

128 words

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The diagram illustrates how bees produce honey

The government’s investment in arts, music and theater is a waste of money. Government should invest these funds in public services instead. To what extent do you agree with this statement?

In some countries an increasing number of people are suffering from health problems as a result of eating too much fast food. It is therefore necessary for governments to impose a higher tax on this kind of food. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Some people believe tertiary education should be free, but others say universities should charge students. Discuss both this views and give your opinion.

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