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Some people think that access to internet is necessary to live a full life? Do you agree or disagree?

#people #access #internet #life
In recent days, usage of
internet
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 is becoming
populer
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popular
 in the world
due to
 the advance of technology. Some
people
 believe that using
internet
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 is essential for their daily needs. I strongly believe,
internet
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 delivers so many benefits for human in their life and it is becoming a primary one at that moment. In
the
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term
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 of the first benefit and why it is becoming important in
humans
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 life,
internet
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 makes some
people
 find it easy to get some pieces of information from several resources on
internet
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. Many
people
,
particulary
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particularly
 for
people
 living in
the
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 area that has
good
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 signal, only need a few minutes and one
click
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 to seek any information. Back
then
, humans had to go to somewhere
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which
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 the information
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. It
also
 needed more time and effort to
achive
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achieve
 the news or data.
Moreover
, upon
internet
 is becoming a part of
citizen's
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 life,
a
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number of activities is able to
do
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 everywhere. It
cut
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cuts
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 any cost since so many
tutorial
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tutorials
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 are provided on
internet
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the internet
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. As in, everyone can
acces
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access
 the tutorial of exercise from
youtube
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YouTube
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 and do it by following the talent of the video. They do not have to go to the gym
that
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 requires more expenditure, even sometimes
demands
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the
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 high cost. Another experience of utilizing is free learning from
youtube
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YouTube
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. Some students learn
english
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 by watching videos on
youtube
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YouTube
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. There are a bunch of lists of
english
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youtuber
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YouTubers
 teaching some tips in learning
english
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,
people
also
 can find some of them reviewing
the
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films or books so that they study
english
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 free. In conclusion, the
internet
 trend in
this
 era helps
people
 a lot in
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 some activities if they utilize it wisely and without harmful ways.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • indispensable
  • digital divide
  • social isolation
  • misinformation
  • lifelong learning
  • personal development
  • online banking
  • digital content
  • physical distances
  • social interaction
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