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Band 7

The map illustrates the between and predicted future Islip town centre.

The map illustrates the between and predicted future Islip town centre.
The map represents the recent look of an Islip
town
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centre
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 and how it has been planned for the future.
Overall
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, the
town
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centre
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 has been planned to develop with lots of new
facilities
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,
According to
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 the development plan, the shops which used to be in the north of
town
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 next to the main road have been planned to be replaced with a bunch of
facilities
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, like, a car park, shopping
centre
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, bus station, and new houses. The main road has been planned to be restricted to pedestrians only, which separates the old shops and new
facilities
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. An introduction of new housing has been planned next to the old shops, near the park. The most important development could be seen in the form of a dual carriageway which
circulate
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circulates
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 the
town
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centre
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 by passing school, and housing and would connect all
facilities
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 with a separate exit to the new housing.

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Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words town, centre, facilities with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Only 2 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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