The chart below shows the changes in three different areas of crime in MAnchester city center from 2003-2012.
The line graph depicts the amends in three different places of crime in Manchester
city
between 2002 and 2012.
Capitalize word
City
Overall
, it is noticeable that burglary was the most popular type of crime before 2007 when car therft
replaced it. Correct your spelling
theft
Furthermore
, there was
upward trends from robbery and car theft, Change the verb form
were
whereas
burglary showed downward trends over the period in question.
To begin
with burglary, it accounted for nearly 3,500 which rose marginally to under 4,000 in 2004. However
, it fell significantly to 1,000 roughly in 2008. Consequently
, it was erratic in the final years
and obtained approximately 1,500.
With regards to car theft, it decreased progressively from under 2,500 to namely
2,000 in 2006. Rephrase
apply
Therefore
, it showed vaccilation
in the next 6 Correct your spelling
vacillation
vaccination
years
and reached to
approximately 2,700 and was the area which had Change preposition
apply
a large quantities
of crime throughout the period. In terms of Correct the article-noun agreement
a large quantity
large quantities
robbery
it obtained 500 which went up to 1,000 in 2005 before dropping to 500 again in 2006 and maintaining the same level during the next three Add a comma
robbery,
years
.Finally
, it rose dramatically to 700 in 2010 and dropped to 600 in the final years
and was the type of placed
which had Change the form of the verb
place
a
lowest number of crimes over the period in question.Change the article
the
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