The line graph shows the average number of patients

The line graph shows the average number of patients
the line graph provides information on the average number of
patient
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patients
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in four different
clinic
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clinics
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in a hospital over
the
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apply
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specific periods of time. In general, patients in
eye
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the eye
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clinic
increase
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increased
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significantly when both diabetic and dental patients went up slightly
whereas
the
patient
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patients
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in
birth
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the birth
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control clinic
shows
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showed
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fluctuating
number
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numbers
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • line graph
  • average number of patients
  • period of time
  • displays
  • changes
  • fluctuations
  • information
  • specific duration
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