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The bar chart below shows the total number of Olympic medals won by twelve different countries.

The bar chart below shows the total number of Olympic medals won by twelve different countries.
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The bar graph illustrates how many
winner
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winners
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of
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from
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 twelve different countries
who
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apply
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participated in
Olympics
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the Olympics
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.
Overall
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, the USA has the most
gold
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,
silver
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, and
bronze
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medals
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while
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 Japan has the lowest total
medals
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. Japan is the least winner of
gold
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 and
silver
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medals
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 and China
is
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apply
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currently
having
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has
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 the lowest amount of
bronze
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medal
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medals
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. The USA has
written
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been written
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 as
winner
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the winner
a winner
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 of more than 2,000
medals
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 in the
olympics
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Olympics
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 with almost 1,000
gold
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medals
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, above 500
of
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apply
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silver
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medals
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, and around 1,000
bronze
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medals
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.
In contrast
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, Japan is
in rank
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ranked
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 12th
of
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in
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 the
olympic
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Olympic
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medals
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 collection with
number
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the number
a number
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 below 500. The Japanese
is
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are
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 winning around 250
gold
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 and
silver
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medals
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 (approximately 125 each) which
make
Correct subject-verb agreement
makes
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 the country
as
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apply
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the littlest in winning
gold
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 and
silver
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medals
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.
However
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, China
is having
Wrong verb form
has
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 the smallest amount of
bronze
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medals
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, around 100.
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Replace the words gold, silver, bronze, medals with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 3 times.
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