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Band 2.5

Some people think that sending criminals to prison is not effective. Instead, they should receive education and job training. Do you agree or disagree?

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Crime is always bad
as well as
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 the criminals. Some people prefer to educate the criminals rather than punishment. I totally agree with
this
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 statement. The primary reason to support
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education is that it helps them to differentiate
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 good and bad. If they can learn the details of bad things and the procedures of escaping from those, they might avoid any
types
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 of crime.
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, to eradicate
youth-criminals
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youth criminals
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 Bangladesh developed
youth
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a youth
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 training centre.
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, the positive change is notable. Youngers are now inclined
on developing
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 themselves
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 previously they were involved in bad
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. Another reason to promote study is the increase
of
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 employment.
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, unemployment is
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 a reason
of
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for
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 committing
crime
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crimes
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 to earn money.
Study
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,
however
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, helps them to get a better job to lead their life. After completion of
study
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study,
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 everybody gets a good job, which ensures them a good source of income.
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, most of the
universitities
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universities
 in Germany have a link with the employers, which
help
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 the students to get a better job.
On the other hand
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, sending prison could not
ensures
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 the income source.
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, after coming from that they continue their activities. In conclusion, it can be said that teaching is the best medicine for a criminal. Without training, it is not possible to stop any
types
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 of criminal
activities
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activity
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.
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task response
Ensure that the essay addresses all aspects of the task prompt, including both the opinion and the reasons supporting it. Provide a more balanced consideration of the opposing viewpoint for a more comprehensive response.
coherence cohesion
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lexical resource
Expand your vocabulary to express ideas more precisely and fluently. Use a wider range of vocabulary to enhance the quality and variety of the language.
grammatical range
The essay contains several grammatical errors. Enhance the accuracy of your grammar and sentence structures for clearer and more effective communication.

Word Count

IELTS says that you should write a minimum of 250 words in writing task 2. If you go under word count you will lose marks in task response.

A very long essay will not give you a higher band score.

Aim for between 260 to 290 words in writing task 2. This will ensure a concise essay and will be realistic in terms of time management. You have only 40 minutes to write the essay and you need around 10 minutes of planning time, so you will not be able to write a long essay in 30 minutes.

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