The charts below show what UK graduate and postgraduate students who did not go into full-time work did after leaving college in 2018. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The charts below show what UK graduate and postgraduate students who did not go into full-time work did after leaving college in 2018.

Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The bar charts illustrate what graduate and postgraduate collegians did after college (excluding full-time jobs) in the year 2018.
Overall
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, it can be seen that the majority of people from both of these groups continued their
further
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education. A smaller proportion found a part-time job and the least number of former students were involved with voluntary work. In general, the graduates outnumbered thousands the postgraduates in 2008. The most sufficient part of graduates, 29,665, signed up for
further
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study in 2008, followed by 17,735 who found a part-time job and 16, 235 who were unemployed after getting their degree. The
last
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of them (3,500) became volunteers after graduation.
Although
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postgraduates were fewer in
this
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year,
similarly
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to graduates, the highest number of them (2,725) continued their education in 2008. Just after them by little, 2,535 former collegians started not full-time jobs. The smallest proportion of postgraduate students were involved in voluntary work ( 345 people).
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "further".
Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
Vocabulary: Only 4 basic words for charts were used.
Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • graduate/postgraduate students
  • full-time work
  • further study
  • part-time education
  • voluntary work
  • unemployment
  • travel/gap year
  • percentage/proportion
  • field of study
  • economic factors
  • trends
  • comparison
  • analysis
  • correlate
  • preferences
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