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The Internet when used as a source of information, has more drawbacks than advantages. To what extent do you agree with this statement?

#internet #source #information
internet
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The internet
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one
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 of the
sours
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sources
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 of
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getting
details , i strongly believe that sometimes it has a bad effect on our life
specially
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 on our
time
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as
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mabye
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maybe
the source is out of science . refers to the
internet
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wildspeard
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wildcard
nowaday
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nowadays
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, on the
one
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 everyone can use
for
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it for
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 a lot of things
such
 as watching tv,
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and listning
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listning
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listening
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podcast
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podcasts
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,
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however,
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one
 of the downsides it
couses
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causes
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time
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without
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being
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mindful of our
time
,
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because when we are looking for some
information
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internet
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the internet
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 after finishing it leads us to something else after two
hour
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 we know that , we
pend
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spend
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 a quality
time
 on social media ,for instance ,
accourding
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according
 to
one
 of the
researchs
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research
 that
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 read 2
month
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months
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 ago , the
writter
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writer
 talked about that
one
 of the factors to fail students in school is
internet
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 ,
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pupils
 use it for
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along
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long
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time
 during the day .
on the other hand
 , when citizens attempt to read about
one
 subject or seek
a
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specific details from artificial intelligence it might be published by someone that does not have any certification or
information
 about that topic
that is
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are
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unsure about sources
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on
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internet
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 ,
due to
 there are not any regulating or limiting to come out that kind of
information
 we have to really aware about the real
soursce
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source
 or shoddy
one
 ,
i
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 give you a
pesonal
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personal
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last
one
 year my mother said that she watched an advertisement about
tablet
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a tablet
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 that it was useful for pain in her feet, she bought it ,
then
 after 2 month she got sick because of the tablet was really
dangrous
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dangerous
 for her health , in conclusion , individuals are
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using
useing
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using
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the
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Internet
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internet
for getting
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to get
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an
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information
a piece of information
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information
 ,
although
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and although
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 it has a number of
advantage
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advantages
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 even though ,the negative impact of it more than
cons
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the cons
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 ,
such
 as
like
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apply
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wasting
out
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time
as well as
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the wrong
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information
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