The pie charts below show the percentage of five kinds of books sold by a bookseller between 1972 and 2012

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The Pie Chart displays the sales of five kinds of books sold by a bookseller in 1972, 1992, and 2012.

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, It is readily apparent that Adult

fiction

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became the most popular by the year 2012 and other genres declined (Biography, Travel, and Others) As well, interest in Children's

Fiction

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increased.

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, The percentage of Adult

fiction

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sold increased over the years but rose significantly during 1992-2012, (20%, 25% to 45%)

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, The proportion of children's

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bought increased slightly throughout the years from 20%, 22%, to 25%.

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, The percentage of retail

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biography and 'others' dropped

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2012 from 20% to 15% to 8% and from 25% to 20% to 12% respectively.

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, the figure of the genre Travel sold fluctuated over the years. It was 15% in 1972 and

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rose to 18% in 1992 but

then

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declined to 10% in 2012

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 9.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Introduction & conclusion present

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 6.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 6.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 9.0

Complete response

Suitable writing tone

Appropriate word count

4 paragraphs

150 words

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The pie charts below show the percentage of five kinds of books sold by a bookseller between 1972 and 2012

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