You recently received a letter from a friend asking for advice about whether to go to college or to try to get a job. You think he/she should get a job. Write a letter to this friend. In your letter •say why he/she would not enjoy going to college •explain why getting a job is a good idea for him/her •suggest types of job that would be suitable for him/her Write at least 150 words. You do NOT need to write any addresses. Begin your letter ad follows:

#friend #advice #college #job #•say #•explain #idea #•suggest #addresses #ad

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Dear Shanto, I hope you are in sound health and doing well. I am writing

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letter to advise you on whether to go to college or try to get a

job

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. As I know, you recently completed your BBA from Standard College, and your CGPA is outstanding. I heard that you have been trying to

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in an

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program at the same college, which is not a wise decision from my point of view. I think that you will not enjoy your

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program

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right after completing the

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course because the academic environment will make you monotonous. Despite enrolling in an

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program, I will suggest you search for a part-time

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related to your bachelor's degree.

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part-time

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will help you to familiar with the corporate environment

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gain professional experience. An internship in a financial institution will be the best option for you which will assist you to get a full-time

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in any financial company in the future.

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, you can apply your earned knowledge in

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company to achieve the organizational goals. I truly believe that the above suggestions will help you make the correct decision. Warm wishes, Faisal

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

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Lexical resource: 7.0

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Task Achievement: 6.0

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8 paragraphs

202 words

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