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A forgive friend of your plans to visit your place and stay with you, but you do not have time on that date Give your friend another atlernate date to come. In your letter , you should apologize for it Explaine how you will be busy on that suggest to him/ her an alternate time to come

#forgive #friend #plans #visit #place #time #date #atlernate #explaine
Dear Hina, I trust
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good stead. I apologise for it.
Beacuse
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Because
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 am not available that
date
due to
 busy Schedule.
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 feel not good to say you. I would like to tell you
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the reasons why
i
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 cannot come
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date
. On that day after
duty
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 have an appointment
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 my mother
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for
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 a routine
check up
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. Might be they take more time during
check up
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. And
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 could not
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 so that
why
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is why
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i
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 want to say that can we meet the alternative
date
. For sake of
calrity
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clarity
,
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 shall
eluciated
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elucidated
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 of my unavailability.
Nevertheless
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 would not leave you bereft of an alternate
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if i
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i
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 give you the proper time. I assure you of
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your
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 to ensuring your stay is delightful and
unforgetable
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unforgettable
. Warm wishes Regards, Ali
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task response
Ensure that the letter is focused on task response and answers the prompt clearly. The reasons for unavailability and the alternative date should be clearly and logically presented.
coherence and cohesion
The greeting and closing need to be more formal and appropriately addressed. Work on structuring the letter with a clear introduction, body, and conclusion.
lexical resource
Expand the vocabulary by using a broader range of words and phrases. The language used should be more formal and appropriate for a letter.
grammatical range
Improve the sentence structure, tense usage, and punctuation. There are several grammatical errors that impact the overall clarity of the letter.

Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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