The graph below shows the consumption of 3 spreads from 1981 to 2007.
The given polyline illustrates how
people
used 3 different types of oil in their food during the period of time 1981 to 2007. The units are measured in grams
.
Overall
, the utilization of butter was dominant at the beginning of the period then
it decreased dramatically by the end years.conversely
, fewer people
used low fat and reduced spreads in 1996 to increased overwhelmingly till 2001. Besides
, margarine
was the kiddo in terms of use by the first years.
Most of
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people
preferred to cook with butter they use
nearly 141 Wrong verb form
used
grams
in 1981 to reach its peak at around 160 in 1986.meanwhile, it dropped significantly to reach at
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grams
in 1991 after
that it decreased gradually Correct word choice
and after
by
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in
following
years.
The rate of using Correct article usage
the following
margarine
was fluctuating
from the first year to 1991 it remained stable until 1996 they Wrong verb form
fluctuated
use
only 100 Wrong verb form
used
grams
of it. In 2001, people
was
consumed low-fat , reduced Unnecessary verb
apply
soreads
and Correct your spelling
spreads
margarine
.only
around 83 Capitalize word
Only
grams
were consumed by people
of low-fat,reduced spreads and margarine
in 1996.Submitted by ft00m_309 on
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