The graph below shows the number of tourists visiting a particular Caribbean island between 2010 and 2017.

The graph below shows the number of tourists visiting a particular Caribbean island between 2010 and 2017.
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The line graph depicts the
number
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of tourists, in millions, who stayed on cruise ships or the islands during their visit from one of the Caribbean islands over an interval from 2010 to 2017.
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, the total
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of visitors increased significantly.
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, visitors opted to stay on cruise ships more than on the island until 2015 when that changed. On the one hand, the
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of tourists who chose to stay on the island in 2010 started at about 0.25
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and gradually increased to 2
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in 2017.
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, one noticeable change in figures is for 2012, which is the only point that it faced a decline.
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, the graph for travellers who stayed on the island is quite different than the two other lines. The
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here begins at around 0.75
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and with a small deviation stays there for next year.
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during the next two years fit went from 0.75
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in 2011 to 1.5
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in 2013 and stayed there until 2015, afterwards, declined to about 1.5
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and
finally
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stood at 1.5
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again in 2017.
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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Vocabulary: Replace the words number, million with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "number of" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: The word "graph" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "changed" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "decline" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "stayed" was used 6 times.
Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • fluctuation
  • peak
  • trough
  • upward trend
  • downward trend
  • steady increase
  • sharp decline
  • seasonal variation
  • cruise ship visitors
  • island stay visitors
  • economic impact
  • environmental impact
  • tourism industry
  • sustainable tourism
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