The diagram below shows the process by which bricks are manufactured for the building industry.
The diagram illustrates how
bricks
are produced for the building industry.
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Overall
, the process comprises a number of steps, starting with digging clay, through different mixing stages, and ending with finished products being distributed to retailers and wholesalers.
At the beginning of the process, clay which is one of the most important materials is harnessed, after which Linking Words
this
ingredient is filtered in order to eliminate metals. Linking Words
Subsequently
, it is mixed up sand and water into a mixture, before being cut by a wire cutter or formed by mould to ensure that all Linking Words
bricks
have uniform size.
The process continues with the Use synonyms
bricks
being brought to the drying oven for 24-48 hours. After those dry Use synonyms
bricks
are conveyed to the kiln and experience different temperatures, from 2000C to 9800C and from 8700C to 13000C respectively. Use synonyms
Then
it is stored in a cooling chamber within 48-72 hours. Linking Words
Finally
, those products are packaged, which are Linking Words
then
shipped to customers by specialized vehicles.Linking Words
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