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The graph below shows the number of tourists going to three resorts in a small town from January to June. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph below shows the number of tourists going to three resorts in a small town from January to June. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
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The depicted graph reveals the
quantity
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 of
tourists
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 who visited three different
resorts
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 in a small town in a six-month time period (January to June). As can clearly be seen,
ski
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resorts
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 and cross-country
ski
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resorts
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 experienced
a
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fluctuating attendance,
whereas
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 the number of campground visitors maintained stability throughout the given time period. The
ski
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 resort was most popular at the beginning of the year in January, with 8000
tourists
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;
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, campgrounds started with the fewest visitors, with 2000. In the following months,
ski
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resorts
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 exhibited a rapid plunge to 4000
tourists
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 in April, soon after skyrocketing to its apex of 10000
tourists
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 in May, and remaining at
this
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 impressive level. Vice versa, cross-country
resorts
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 opened the season with approximately 3000
tourists
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,
spiraling
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 upwards to its peak of 10000
tourists
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 in April,
subsequently
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 shrinking to 6000
tourists
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 in June. Despite that oscillation of popularity, campgrounds only saw a scant
soaring
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 from January to April, from 2000 to 3500
tourists
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, and
afterward
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afterwards
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 a
meager
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meagre
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 decline to 3000
tourists
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 until June.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words tourists, resorts, ski with synonyms.
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