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The table and charts below give information on the police budget for 2017 and 2018 in one area of Britain. The table show where the money came from and the charts show how it was distributed.

The table and charts below give information on the police budget for 2017 and 2018 in one area of Britain. The table show where the money came from and the charts show how it was distributed.
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table chart illustrates the three different sources where the
police
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 budget was from, in a particular area in Britain, and the pie charts provide where it went between 2017 and 2018.
Overall
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, the national government proved to be the main source providing money for
police
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 funds; meanwhile, the
police
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 budget was spent on salaries, which were given to officers and staff. The total amount of the
police
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 budget was 318.6
million
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pounds
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 in 2018, which increased from 304.7
million
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pounds
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 in 2017. The majority of money was from the national government, as it recorded the highest amount of funding in both 2017 and 2018 with 175.5
million
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pounds
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 and 177.8m
million
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pounds
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, respectively.
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this
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, local taxes rose the most among the three sources, by approximately 10
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pounds
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 from 91.2
million
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pounds
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 in 2017 to 102.3
million
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pounds
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 in 2018,
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 other sources recorded a slight increase, from just 38
million
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pounds
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 to 38.5
million
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pounds
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 throughout the given time period.
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 salaries were the popular expenditure as it accounted for 75% in 2017, it started to decrease to 69% in 2018.Technology,
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, climbed discernibly from 8% in 2017 to 14% in 2018. Interestingly, buildings and transport remained unchanged at 17% throughout the given years.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 67%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words police, million, pounds with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "give" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "give" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • budget allocation
  • fiscal year
  • government grants
  • local taxes
  • police force
  • patrol division
  • detective units
  • traffic control
  • administration expenses
  • operational costs
  • capital expenditure
  • revenue streams
  • expenditure distribution
  • financial resources
  • public safety
  • crime prevention
  • budgetary constraints
  • funding shortfall
  • budget surplus
  • financial planning
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