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The graph below shows the differences in wheat exports over three different areas. Write a report for a university lecturer describing the information shown below.

The graph below shows the differences in wheat exports over three different areas. Write a report for a university lecturer describing the information shown below.
The given line chart compares the amount of
wheat
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 sent abroad from three regions -
Australia
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, Canada, and the
European
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community
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 over the six-year period from 1985 to 1990.
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, Canada recorded the largest overseas delivery of
wheat
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 throughout the period despite some fluctuations. Another noticeable observation is that
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Australia
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’s
wheat
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 exports consistently fell,
whereas
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 those of the
European
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 community grew
stably
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 from 1985 to 1990. In 1985, Canada exported about 19
million
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tons
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 of
wheat
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, slightly more than the
European
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community’s
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 figure, which stood at around 16
million
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tons
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. Meanwhile,
Australia
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 exported approximately 15
million
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tons
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, the lowest among the three. Over the next two years, Canada’s
export
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exports
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 rose significantly to reach a peak of 25
million
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tons
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 in 1988.
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,
this
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 data
then
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 fell sharply to around 14
million
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tons
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 in 1989 before recovering slightly in 1990.
On the other hand
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, the amount of
wheat
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 exported from
Australia
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 showed a gradual decline, going down from 15
million
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tons
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 in 1985 to about 11
million
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tons
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 in 1990.
By contrast
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, the
European
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 community witnessed a steady increase in
wheat
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 sales overseas over the same period, exceeding
Australia
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 in 1989 and
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the
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 peak of 21
million
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tons
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 by 1990.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words wheat, australia, european, million, tons with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "fell" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "slightly" was used 2 times.
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