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The graph below shows the differences in wheat exports over three different areas. Write a report for a university lecturer describing the information shown below.

The graph below shows the differences in wheat exports over three different areas. Write a report for a university lecturer describing the information shown below.
The given line chart indicates the amount of
wheat
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 that was exported from
Australia
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, Canada,and the European Community over the
5 year
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period
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 between 1985 and 1990. It is clear from the graph that, the proportion of
wheat
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 exports experienced different trends.
While
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 the figure for
Australia
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 went down significantly, the opposite trend was true in the European Community.
In addition
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,
it is clear that
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 the numbers in Canada fluctuated, especially during the
period
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 1986 to 1988. In terms of the number of
wheat
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export
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exports
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 in Canada. There was a considerable fluctuation in
wheat
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export
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 over a
5 years
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period
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 from 1985 to 1990. The
export
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 volume went down slowly from 19
million
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 to 17
million
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units
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 between 1985 and 1986. The data increased sharply by eight
million
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units
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 from 1986 to 1988. Between 1988 and 1989, the value of
wheat
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export
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 decreased sharply from 25
million
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 to 14
million
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 before increasing dramatically from 14
million
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units
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 in 1989 to 19
million
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 the following year. Regarding these figures for EC, during the
period
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 from 1985 to 1986, there was a slight plummet in
wheat
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export
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 in
EC-from
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EC from
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 14
million
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 to 12
million
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.
Then
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, there was a slow jump in
wheat
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export
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exports
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 between 1986 and 1988 from about 14
miilion
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million
 to over 15
million
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. The number of
wheat
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export
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exports
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 in
EC-rose
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EC rose
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 sharply from approximately 15
million
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 to more than 21
million
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 between 1988 and 1990. Looking at the data for
Australia
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, From 1985 to 1986, the number of
wheat
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export
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exports
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 in
Australia
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 experienced a slight growth from 15
million
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 to 16
million
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, before witnessing a moderate drop between 1986 and 1990 from around 16
million
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 to over 11
million
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units
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.

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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Replace the words wheat, australia, period, export, million, units with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "data" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "trends" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "went down" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "slowly" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "slight" was used 2 times.
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