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This graph shows the proportion of four different materials that were recycled from 1982 to 2010 in a particular country. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, making comparisons where relevant.

This graph shows the proportion of four different materials that were recycled from 1982 to 2010 in a particular country. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, making comparisons where relevant.
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The following graph provides the data on
recycling
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the recycling
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 rate of 4 various materials –Plastics,
aluminium
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 cans,
glass
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containers
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,
paper
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 and
cardboard
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 – in a country between 1982 and 2010.
Overall
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, the proportion of
the
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apply
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recycled
paper
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 and
cardboard
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 and
glass
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containers
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 was more than plastics and
aluminium
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,
whereas
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 both of them had undergone a reduction in 1990. Delving into the details, the reproduction rate of
paper
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 and
cardboard
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 was over 60 per
cent
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 in the year of 1982 and hit a low of 40 per
cent
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 in 1990 as
glass
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containers
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. In 1994,
recycling
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the recycling
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 percentage of
paper
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 and
cardboard
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 had reached the highest point, representing 80 per
cent
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.
Furthermore
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, the indicators for
glass
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containers
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 were approximately 50 per
cent
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 in 1982 and
fluctuating
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fluctuated
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 became 60 per
cent
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in
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at
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 the end of the period. Shifting the focus to
aluminium
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 and plastics, the percentage for
Aluminium
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 was under 10 per
cent
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 in 1986 and dramatically surged over 40 per
cent
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 over the span of years.
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, the reproduction of plastics was below 10 per
cent
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 in 1990 and almost remained constant up to 2010.
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words aluminium, glass, containers, paper, cardboard, cent with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • proportion
  • recycled
  • materials
  • increased
  • paper and cardboard
  • plastic
  • glass
  • metal
  • significant increase
  • relatively stable
  • fluctuating
  • period
  • starting
  • reaching
  • gradually increasing
  • remained low
  • experienced
  • showed
  • greatest
  • proportion
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