Question : The pie charts below show the average household expenditures in Japan and Malaysia in the year 2010.
Presented for consideration are 2 pie charts pertaining to the typical household spending in 2 countries in 2010.
Generally, Japanese and Malaysians
spent
most of their money on housing and food. Wrong verb form
spend
Additionally
, health care was the sector which had the least expenditure.
Looking at the first chart in further
detail, goods and services was the sector which had the most expenditure at 29% while
the figure
for health care was the lowest at just 6%. Besides
, the proportions of housing, transport and food were also
significant ranging from 20% to 24%.
Turning to the second chart, the lesser proportion of transport at 10% compared to the percentage of the same sector in the first chart at 20%. In addition
, the figure
for housing was the highest at 34% while
the figure
for health care was the lowest at 3%, making it the biggest disparity. Also
, goods and services and food had a similar figure
at 26% and 27% respectively.Submitted by [email protected] on
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