The bar chart gives information about the number of car journeys into the city centre made by residents and non-residents. Write a summery with 150 words

The bar chart gives information about the number of car journeys into the city centre made by residents and non-residents.

Write a summery with 150 words
The given bar graph illustrates the number of
vehichle
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vehicle
journeys
into the city
center
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centre
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made by
residents
and
non-
residents
. At
the
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apply
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first glance,
citizens
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citizens'
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cars decreased over the period of the dataset,
while
non-citizens had a
fluctiation
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fluctuation
fluctuating
pattern.
To begin
with, the
residents
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resident's
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car
journeys
was
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were
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at
peak
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a peak
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in 1996 with 10000 average per day, which was twice as the
non-
residents
.
Although
, the
non-
residents
stats dramatically increased over the next three years,
while
residents
experienced a period of stability.
Moreover
, In 1999, the difference in car
journeys
between the
residents
and the
non-
residents
was about 2000. Surprisingly, in the next year the trend changed totally,
which
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the
non-
residents
overtaked the
residents
with 7500 and 5000, respectively.
This
happened continuously for the next two consecutive years, until in 2003, the
non-
residents
had a sharp fall and its data was recorded by 1000 points below
residents
travels.
Also
, the lowest level for both groups was in 2004 with approximately 3000
journeys
.
Finally
, in 2005,
not
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no
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native individuals made more car
journeys
, but still one of the lowest
level
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levels
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of
dataset
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the dataset
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.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Vocabulary: Replace the words journeys, residents, non-residents with synonyms.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • bar chart
  • car journeys
  • residents
  • non-residents
  • increase
  • years
  • significantly
  • approximately
  • difference
  • gap
  • widened
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