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Some people think that it is more beneficial to take part in sports which are played in teams, like soccer while other people believe that taking part in individual sports is better, like tennis or swimming. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

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Taking
part
 in some kind of activities in
one
 spare time is crucial for
overall
 confidence, relaxation and mental stability. Many individuals would find it more beneficial when doing any type of passion
while
 being in a
group
.
However
, there is
vast
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a vast
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 number of people
who's
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whose
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 need is to be alone
while
 developing
one
's self. All of
this
apply
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 to
sports
. It is being said that taking
part
 in
group
sports
 has
better
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a better
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 outcome on
variety
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a variety
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 of qualities,
while
 others
says
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 the same about individual
one's
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ones
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. In
this
essay
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 I will depict both of those views. In my
opinion
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opinion,
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 taking
part
 in
group
sports
 is more beneficial.
To begin
 with, when you're attending any kind of sport workshop where you have to
asimilate
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assimilate
 with the
group
 you must get in contact with anyone to build any type of relationship. With that being said it makes us more open
on
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 others, which may prominently support our future life position as we are being equipped with splendid interpersonal skills.
Moreover
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 you learn how to cope with all types of emotions.
For instance
, if your team lost the game
you
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, you would not be filled out with anger as you know specific techniques to calm yourself down.
Nevertheless
, when mentioning
the
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individual
sports
 we have to recognize the bright sides as well. It is that
part
 of
one
exsitence
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existence
 that makes
one
's mental health resilient when facing uneasy situations. Tennis players
knows
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 the inside of how to fight
your
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their
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 inner battles when nothing
went
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goes
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 as planned. It makes them immune to
enourmous
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enormous
 stress.
Nonetheless
,
this
 type of
players
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are
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is
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in
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at
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higher
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a higher
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 risk of being selfish and prideful. It is that since they are training on their own with
a
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very little help
of
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 others.
Not to mention
 that any title is being won just by
theirselves
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themselves
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. All in
all
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all,
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 I reckon that any passion makes life
fullfilled
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fulfilled
 with happiness whether it is being individual or
group
enagement
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engagement
management
.
Whereas
 we can not forget
about
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that human needs to be around their
aquainatnces
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acquaintances
 to share their worries, mesmerised moments or
achivements
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achievements
 which can be
acuqired
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acquired
 from cooperation
such
 as sport. It allows anyone to feel seen or attached to
social
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a social
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group
.
Company
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 of peers with
same
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the same
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intrests
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interests
 helps to go
trough
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through
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 life less anxious.
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