60.The table and graph below show information about cinema visits in Auckland between 1995 and 2003. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant

60.The table and graph below show information about cinema visits in Auckland between 1995 and 2003. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant
The table chart displays the average
number
of all ages that visit the cinema and the linear chart illustrates the time of
visits
of the different
age
ranges in Auckland from 1995 to 2003.
Overall
, both the percentage and
number
of
visits
fluctuated during the
period
.
Also
, all
age
ranges varied in the same proportion. In 1995, cinemas had the lowest percentage of
visits
compared with the other
years
, with 67%, during the next two
years
the proportion increased steadily by 5% to 72%, and
this
was maintained during 1991,
while
in 2001 it grew significantly to 80%, but in the
last
year of the
period
, it went back to 72%.
Furthermore
, 1997 had the highest average
number
of cinema
visits
with 11.2, compared with 10.3 in 1995. In 1999 had the lowest
number
of
visits
, with only 7.3,
while
in 2001 and 2003 there was only a difference of 0.1, with 8.4 and 8.3 respectively. In the second graph, all ages had the same variation, people in the
age
range 14 to 24 visited the most the cinema,
while
individuals older than 50 the least. People from 14 to 24, had an average of around 10.3 times
visits
in 1995, and
this
rose moderately to 11 in 1997, but
then
it decreased sharply to just under 10 in 1999, between 1999 and 2001 it grew moderately, remaining relatively stable in the
last
two
years
.
While
people in the
age
range of more than 50, started the
period
with around 9.2
visits
and grew to 10 in 1997, but
then
it dropped to just over 8,
finally
during the
last
4
years
it increased modestly , ending the
period
at approximately an average of 9.
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