60.The table and graph below show information about cinema visits in Auckland between 1995 and 2003. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant
The table chart displays the average
number
of all ages that visit the cinema and the linear chart illustrates the time of Use synonyms
visits
of the different Use synonyms
age
ranges in Auckland from 1995 to 2003.
Use synonyms
Overall
, both the percentage and Linking Words
number
of Use synonyms
visits
fluctuated during the Use synonyms
period
. Use synonyms
Also
, all Linking Words
age
ranges varied in the same proportion.
In 1995, cinemas had the lowest percentage of Use synonyms
visits
compared with the other Use synonyms
years
, with 67%, during the next two Use synonyms
years
the proportion increased steadily by 5% to 72%, and Use synonyms
this
was maintained during 1991, Linking Words
while
in 2001 it grew significantly to 80%, but in the Linking Words
last
year of the Linking Words
period
, it went back to 72%. Use synonyms
Furthermore
, 1997 had the highest average Linking Words
number
of cinema Use synonyms
visits
with 11.2, compared with 10.3 in 1995. In 1999 had the lowest Use synonyms
number
of Use synonyms
visits
, with only 7.3, Use synonyms
while
in 2001 and 2003 there was only a difference of 0.1, with 8.4 and 8.3 respectively.
In the second graph, all ages had the same variation, people in the Linking Words
age
range 14 to 24 visited the most the cinema, Use synonyms
while
individuals older than 50 the least. People from 14 to 24, had an average of around 10.3 times Linking Words
visits
in 1995, and Use synonyms
this
rose moderately to 11 in 1997, but Linking Words
then
it decreased sharply to just under 10 in 1999, between 1999 and 2001 it grew moderately, remaining relatively stable in the Linking Words
last
two Linking Words
years
. Use synonyms
While
people in the Linking Words
age
range of more than 50, started the Use synonyms
period
with around 9.2 Use synonyms
visits
and grew to 10 in 1997, but Use synonyms
then
it dropped to just over 8, Linking Words
finally
during the Linking Words
last
4 Linking Words
years
it increased modestly , ending the Use synonyms
period
at approximately an average of 9.Use synonyms
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