A freiend of yours is thinking of going on a camping holiday for the first time this summer. He has asked for your advice. Write a letter to your friend. the letter, - explain why you think your friend would enjoy a camping holiday - describe some possible disadvantages - say whether you would like to go camping with your friend this summer
Dear Leeza,
I am glad to hear from you. I am going to advise you on what you asked regarding the camping holiday.
To begin
with, I know very well about you since we have been friends since school time. Therefore
, you are much more like a camping such
as thing. I remember that you talked about a camping holiday when we watched a movie at Sharon's place. Even, I am surprised that you still did not do any camping and it was unbelievable.
Secondly
, there are some downsides to camping. Actually, there are too many insects and you have to be safe with them since they are so dangerous. In addition
, the climate changes every time and sometimes heavy cold conditions and you have to bring some winter clothes.
To sum up
, I suggest that you go with someone knowing very well those conditions. Actually, I have an idea about that camping and I went camping last
summer also
. I hope to join with you. if you are interested. In addition
, I could join my friends or parents as well.
I hope you have gained useful advice regarding this
and hope to hear from you as soon as possible.
Best Regards,
DanushkaSubmitted by agdanush on
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Consider providing more specific examples of why your friend would enjoy camping to strengthen your argument.
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Try to address the disadvantages in greater depth, perhaps by offering solutions or ways to mitigate them.
coherence cohesion
Ensure that each paragraph addresses a single idea more clearly to improve the readability.
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The tone of the letter is friendly and appropriate for writing to a friend.
coherence cohesion
The letter is well-structured with a clear greeting and closing, making it easy to follow.
Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
Linking words are very important in your essay.
To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.
Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.
In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.
Linking word examples:
- firstly
- secondly
- thirdly
- in additional
- moreover
- also
- for example
- for instance
- therefore
- however
- although
- even though
- despite