68.The charts below show the amount of financial aid that four countries received and how the money was spent in 1974 and 2014. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant

68.The charts below show the amount of financial aid that four countries received and how the money was spent in 1974 and 2014. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant
The bar graph illustrates the distribution of monetary support in three aspects in 1974 and 2014,
while
the table shows the amount of financial aid that the countries received in the same years.
Overall
, in 1975, the distribution of the money was mainly used in medicine aspects,
while
in 2014 was in finance, and all countries received more financial aid in 1974 than in 2014. In 1974, 80
million
of the money was spent on medicine, in the next 40 years the amount decreased by 20
million
, to 60
million
,
while
catering had the biggest change, in the first year 70
million
was used in
this
field, but in 2014, it dropped dramatically to 15
million
.
Furthermore
, financial aspects varied moderately, from 70
million
to 65
million
in 1974 and 2014 respectively. All countries received higher financial help in 1974 than in 2014, China had the biggest difference, in 1974, they received 62
million
, but
this
went down steadily to only 6
million
in 2014. Thailand had a difference of 30
million
, it dropped from 48
million
to 18
million
,
while
Indonesia only dropped by 15
million
, from 55
million
in 1974 to 30
million
in 2014.
Finally
, South Africa received the highest financial aid in both years, with 65
million
in 1974 and 42
million
in 2014.
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