68.The charts below show the average temperatures in 12 months in three cities and how many hours of sunshine these cities have in a year. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant

68.The charts below show the average temperatures in 12 months in three cities and how many hours of sunshine these cities have in a year. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant
The line graph illustrates the average monthly
temperature
in different cities and the table shows the
hours
of
sunshine
in these cities in one year.
Overall
,
London
and New
York
have similar variations in
temperature
,
while
Sydney’s monthly
temperature
is different. Another significant feature is that
London
's
sunshine
hours
are the shortest. The months from June to August are summer in
London
and New
York
, with 20
ºC
to 22.5
ºC
in
London
and approximately 27.5
ºC
in New
York
,
while
in Sydney is winter, in which the
temperature
varies between 15
ºC
and 17.5
ºC
.
Furthermore
, December, January and February are winters in New
York
, where the
temperature
varies between 4
ºC
and 6
ºC
, in
London
, the
temperature
is a little bit higher, from 6
ºC
to 10
ºC
. Sydney's summer season
temperature
is higher than the other mentioned cities with 26
ºC
to 30
ºC
. New
York
has the largest annual
sunshine
hours
, with 2633
hours
, which is approximately 100
hours
more than Sydney, which has 2520.
Finally
,
London
’s
sunshine
hours
are less than half of Sydney’s , with 1196
hours
.
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