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The chart below shows the number of house holds in the US by their annual income in 2007, 2011, and 2015. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart below shows the number of house holds in the US by their annual income in 2007, 2011, and 2015. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The bar chart illustrates the quantity of US housekeepers by their annual
earning
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earnings
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 in years; 2007, 2011, and 2015.
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, the
number
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 of households whose annual income ranged from 25000 to 99999$ was approximately constant. Despite
this
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, the
number
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 of households with over 100000$ and under 25000$ yearly income had been fluctuating in
mentioned
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the mentioned
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 years. Households earned from 25000$ to 49000$ were less than 30
million
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 in 2007 and 2015,
however
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, their
number
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was equals
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equals
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equal
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 to 30
million
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 in 2011. Those who made 50000 to 79000 were a few more than 20
million
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 and roughly 15
millions
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million
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 earned from 75000$ to 99999$ over a year. The
number
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 of highest paid group was not under 30
million
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 in 2007 and 2011,
although
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, it reached the highest peak in 2015 to over 30
million
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.
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,
lowest
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the lowest
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 paid party made around 25
million
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 in 2007 and their
number
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 slightly increased to a bit less than 30
millioni
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million
 in 2011 and decreased to nearly 27
million
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 people in
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last
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the last
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 reported time.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words number, million with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 3 times.
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