72.In education and employment, some people work harder than others. Why do some peole work harder? Is it always a good thing to work hard?
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, schools in China are very competitive, and students during their years in high school, will be studying almost every day because there are too many students and only around one-tenth or less of students are able to enter university.
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Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
Linking words are very important in your essay.
To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.
Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.
In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.
Linking word examples:
- firstly
- secondly
- thirdly
- in additional
- moreover
- also
- for example
- for instance
- therefore
- however
- although
- even though
- despite